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2 NPC Hitmen/Gunmen - 2 NPC Gunmen
with 2x revolvers and 2x Crotch Rockets - [x1] Revolver & [x1] Crotch Rockets
1 Gun Store, Coppa’s Guns - Approved. [See below tho']
New Interior, Exterior, and inventory
1 Store Manager - Approved
1 Dodge Charger (from the gun battle) - Approved
1 Cargo truck (from gun battle) - Approved
X Dead NPCs - [x5]
A shipment of illegal weapons coming in every week - Approved. [But See Below]
OK, Work with me here. The RP is good, but like Jacob says it has a lot of 'Filler', what is filler? Useless stuff that makes your rp longer, and the word count high. Second thing, try and space out your RPing... It's hard to read like that. The dialouge you use is pretty good I gotta' say, a lot of action and very realistic.
Now, about the gun shop... I barley approved that, good thing I'm in a good mood, but I gotta' do this, the gun shop is very small, its nothing big. But its good enough to have in a corner store or something.
The store manager, you could of described him more, but it was good enough, he isnt very skilled, but a few days on the job he'll get better, maybe he can carry a gun around .
The two cars, you deserve them, the gun battle was very good, and I mean that... very good.
Dead npcs... hm.. pretty good, I gave you 5.
Very good bro', I enjoyed the fast ready... keep it up.
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[Eli The Dealer; Said;]
Get off my nuts, faggot.
[Mr. BigValboski; Said;]
How could you leave MSRP! FAGGOT! TRAITOR!
[Eli The Dealer; Said;]
Just like when I left your mom after I fucked her without a condom, and she became pregnant with you.
[Mr. BigValboski; Said;]
My mom killed her self
[Eli The Dealer; Said;]
Yeah, so would I if I was her, I mean raising a kid like you by her self... damn... good for her.
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